Write an eighty-character account of a trip
| English | Français |
|---|---|
| chronology | chronology |
| supporting detail | supporting detail |
A decision before an answer
- 我去过北京 is true information but does not explain a memorable trip or develop an eighty-character account.
- Your goal: Plan a connected account meeting the new minimum length.
A decision before an answer
- I / me我去过Beijing, capital of the…北京 is true information but does not explain a memorable trip or develop an eighty-character account.
- Your goal: Plan a connected account meeting the new minimum length.
Read the relationship
- The new level-four sample writing has five picture sentences followed by one short text, twenty-five minutes in all. Its final prompt asks for at least eighty Chinese characters about an unforgettable trip. Level-four writing preparation must now include connected text; arranging isolated words alone is insufficient.
- Organise time, place, events and a reason for remembering.
Which detail develops the trip rather than repeating an evaluation?
It adds an event tied to the situation.
Use the defining rule
- Plan four moves: when and where; who travelled; an important event; why it remains memorable. A brief complication such as rain can connect events naturally: 虽然下雨了，但是我们仍然… . The event should explain the evaluation, not simply repeat 我很高兴 after every sentence.
- Use concrete details without contradicting the task.
Use the defining rule
- Plan four moves: when and where; who travelled; an important event; why it remains memorable. A brief complication such as rain can connect events naturally: although虽然to rain下雨(completed / change)了，but但是we / us我们still仍然… . The event should explain the evaluation, not simply repeat I / me我very很happy高兴 after every sentence.
- Use concrete details without contradicting the task.
What should a memorable-trip ending do?
The evaluation must follow from the described events.
Check the conditions
- Use time links such as 出发前, 到了以后 and 第二天 to organise the account. Count the Chinese characters in a draft conservatively, excluding punctuation and any Latin text, and leave room above the minimum. Do not pad with a copied prompt or repeated sentence. Length is a floor; relevance, clarity and language control still matter.
- Use concrete details without contradicting the task.
Original model: 去年暑假，我和姐姐坐火车去了杭州。出发前，我担心天气太热，没想到第二天就下雨了。我们没有马上回旅馆，而是在湖边的小店喝茶，听老板介绍当地的生活。雨停以后，我们沿着湖慢慢走，看见了很美的晚霞。那次旅行让我明白，计划改变了，也可能遇到新的快乐。 Count exceeds eighty Chinese characters; the rain creates an event and the final sentence explains its significance.
Check the conditions
- Use time links such as to set off出发front前, to / arrive到(completed / change)了after以后 and next day第二天 to organise the account. Count the Chinese characters in a draft conservatively, excluding punctuation and any Latin text, and leave room above the minimum. Do not pad with a copied prompt or repeated sentence. Length is a floor; relevance, clarity and language control still matter.
- Use concrete details without contradicting the task.
Original model: last year去年summer vacation暑假，I / me我and / with和older sister姐姐坐火车to go去(completed / change)了Hangzhou subprovincial city…杭州。to set off出发front前，I / me我anxious担心weather天气太热，didn't expect没想到next day第二天then / just就to rain下雨(completed / change)了。we / us我们not have / haven't没有right away马上variant of 回回hotel旅馆，rather而是at / in在lakeside湖边(of / 's)的small store小店to drink tea喝茶，to listen to听boss老板to introduce (sb to sb)介绍local当地(of / 's)的to live生活。雨停after以后，we / us我们to go along沿着lake湖slowly慢慢to walk走，to see看见(completed / change)了very很Midea (brand)美的sunset glow晚霞。那次to travel旅行to let / make让I / me我clear明白，plan计划to change改变(completed / change)了，also也maybe / possible可能to meet遇到new新(of / 's)的happy快乐。 Count exceeds eighty Chinese characters; the rain creates an event and the final sentence explains its significance.
Complete the contrast: 虽然下雨了，____我们还是出发了。
虽然…但是… links concession and outcome.
Apply the task format
- During review, check the travel task, chronology and pronoun references before correcting every small language error. Explain which detail supports the reason for remembering. The teacher applies criterion feedback rather than inventing an official scaled score for this original rehearsal.
- Use concrete details without contradicting the task.
The legacy sentence-order practice is preparation, not a complete rehearsal of the new connected-writing task.
Which answer fits this case?
Plan a connected account meeting the new minimum length
Meeting eighty characters alone guarantees a strong response.
Task fulfilment, coherence and language still need review.
Keep the distinctions
- chronology 时间顺序 — The sequence in which events occur.
- supporting detail 具体细节 — A fact that develops or supports the main account.
- Plan a connected account meeting the new minimum length.
- Organise time, place, events and a reason for remembering.
- Use concrete details without contradicting the task.
Keep the distinctions
- chronology (concept of) time时间sequence顺序 — The sequence in which events occur.
- supporting detail concrete具体details细节 — A fact that develops or supports the main account.
- Plan a connected account meeting the new minimum length.
- Organise time, place, events and a reason for remembering.
- Use concrete details without contradicting the task.
Match each term with its precise meaning in this lesson.
Keep the distinctions stated in the teaching example.
Put this lesson’s reasoning or event sequence in order.
The order follows the stated process; check each stage before the next.